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Sweet Music

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This is the first up in my set of Lolita themed background ponies. I'm really inexperienced with foliage and nature elements in general so this was a lot of firsts for me. I experimented with a lot of things in this one and I learned quite a bit :)

Relevant song: [link] Totally fits ;)

Vinyl Scratch and Octavia: [link]
Doctor Hooves and Derpy: [link]
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:star::star::star::star: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Impact

At a first glance, I find this to be pretty breathtaking. The lighting puts a clear emphasis to where I should be looking. Your way of shading with very cool shadows and the way you've done the hair and folds on clothing seems to create a lot of life in this image.

I'm also pretty new to foliage, but I think I might have a few thoughts. I see that there are basically two colors in your grass. To me, these brush strokes look a bit like literal grass.What I think might be throwing us off is that there is so much space between each literal blade of grass. I know we're both fairly new to foliage but yeah...

We could also consider coloring the grass a different color from the trees or bushes. To make them easier to differentiate.

The river feels a bit overdone as the waves are very, very dense. Whenever I have been referencing water to try to understand it, at this scale, the surface of the water ought to be much smoother with very clear waves. I also think adding reflections of tree canopies in the water by adding greens lines to indicate waves could make the water feel more convincing, but I don't know how that would turn out.

While I think your anatomy is very commendable, I feel that BonBon's front leg which isn't holding the Cherry doesn't look natural. I think it would look more natural if her fetlock was bent back instead of being bent forward as if that leg was standing. Lyra's back hoof looks bigger than other hooves. It may be worth considering that the facial anatomy may look vaguely dog-like to some. I don't find the faces to be overly dog-like to start resembling the wrong animal too much, but that could probably be avoided by having a lower jaw a shape comparable to that of Luna and Celestia.

What kinda throws me off is the shading on the cherry which BonBon is holding. For some reason I'm expecting Lyra blocking out the sun so the Cherry wouldn't be shaded like this. IMO, since there's so much visual weight to that little cherry, it really messes with my perception of depth.

Of course, I feel that there's plenty of merit in a number of things, but for me, the foreleg, cherry, the grass and maybe the water doesn't feel perfect.